Hi all....what no posts yet! You must all be working hard on your drafts. Make sure you don't simply reword the essay topic. Be very clear about what you will be exploring and the style of your response. Good luck all and I look forward to reading your posts this week.
Identity and Belonging can be a really sad topic if you think about it. For example if you don't believe in your place in the world and it seems to be expected that you know at least a tiny bit were you are and where your going.
Identity is a pain. If you have a fully developed identity it seems like you must have an huge ego, being proud and strong and confident (which aren't bad qualities but it seems so condescending).
Using personal experience for this SAC is invasive and it would be bad for some people to have the 'public' knowing about some things. I know, if you dont want it known/seen don't write it, or it wont be seen by anyone apart from the teacher.
> if you dont use personal experience for examples what can you use?
Really good questions Lizzie and it shows you have given some thought to the task. Given that it is a "draft" don't worry if it's not perfect. The first step is to get something on the page then improve it. I'm not sure about your questions re. lay-out. Do you mean it may not follow TEEL? I suggest youwork from a plan that follows TEEL and play around with it. There is no need to write using particularly personal examples: there is plenty to draw from in the film text, the poem and general knowledge. I have included a link to a really good article relevant to the task ALL STUDENTS SHOULD READ THIS. http://www.theage.com.au/opinion/society-and-culture/its-time-girls-rejected-push-to-join-riteofpassage-rituals-20100930-15z6i.html
I'll check in again Sat if you have some specific questions. Read some of the posts from other forms as I've noticed some some quite good. Go Saints! (I think that's what I'm meant to say if I want to conform to the social expectations at this time of the year)
Ms Kennedy i have a question. Can we draw on personal experience as well as being quite general and mentioning a study that a University did about conformity? Because that is what i was planning on doing.
If you refer to a study that was conducted by a university there are 2 things you need to do. Firstly you need to ensure that you mention it in your statement of explanation and explain why you are using it. Secondly when you refer to it in your essay you must be VERY precise. What university? What year? What was the title of the study? Who were the authors? Make sure it is a well known university not some half baked university of feel good academia!So you would say," In the Melbourne University study entitled "Isolation and the Community" (Jackson and Sonnet:2008)the authors found that 40% blah blah blah. Yes you can draw on personal experience but make sure that the essay does not become an anecdote.You have to EXPLORE THE THEME not tell a story. Feel free to post any more questions if you have them.
Statement of intention: For the SAC I have chosen to explore the prompt ‘conformity destroys individuality’. I disagree with this prompt and will be arguing that conforming does not necessarily mean you are losing your individuality and that being an individualist can lead to an unhappy lifestyle. I am writing this essay for people who already have a good understanding and knowledge of the topic and prompt. I will be writing it as an expository essay with no personal references in my essay. I will be drawing on the ideas of identity and Belonging through the film ‘About a boy’, as well as individualism, conformity and isolation. As I am writing this piece for knowledgeable readers I will be using formal language as well as writing in the third person throughout my essay to appear informative and knowledgeable the whole time.
For my SAC I have chosen to write an expository response to the topic: "To be true to yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is a great achievement". I would like to discuss what it means to be true to yourself in terms of culture and/or religion and this is where i may draw on personal experience from my culture. In addition i thought of incorporating "In Duty Bound" as part of the bit about being true to yourself. I would also like to use "About a Boy" and talk about how Marcus is an weird individual and how people like Will try to make him a different person in contrast to his mother who wanted him to be himself. (I'm not sure if that will work or not, will have to re-watch the film). Another thing i would like to talk about are countries/cultures that haven't been changed by Western influences. I think this would work well wit the context of "identity and belonging".
For my Expository/Persuasive SAC, I have selected the prompt ‘Conformity destroys Individuality’. I will be combining both expository and persuasive to discuss this prompt. In doing this I hope to provide an explanation for both the negatives and positives in relation to conformity and individuality and then finishing with my own opinion. I have looked at this topic from a different angle also and will bring up my view that individuality is a form of conformity; everyone conforms to something, some ‘label’ whether they realise it or not.
I am aiming my piece of writing to an educated adult who has a thorough and clear understanding of the theme ‘Identity and Belonging’ and also are familiar with the studied texts and stimulus material provided.
I have chosen to write my essay in the form of both an expository and persuasive piece consisting of an introduction, three body paragraphs (structured using TEEL) and finishing with a conclusion.
I will employ a formal tone and speak using first person language as I aim to persuade the reader to agree with the points I bring forward.
Hi all....what no posts yet! You must all be working hard on your drafts. Make sure you don't simply reword the essay topic. Be very clear about what you will be exploring and the style of your response. Good luck all and I look forward to reading your posts this week.
ReplyDeleteMs Kennedy, I'm pretty sure that my 'draft' will be rushed and not set out properly.
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Identity and Belonging can be a really sad topic if you think about it. For example if you don't believe in your place in the world and it seems to be expected that you know at least a tiny bit were you are and where your going.
ReplyDeleteIdentity is a pain. If you have a fully developed identity it seems like you must have an huge ego, being proud and strong and confident (which aren't bad qualities but it seems so condescending).
Using personal experience for this SAC is invasive and it would be bad for some people to have the 'public' knowing about some things.
I know, if you dont want it known/seen don't write it, or it wont be seen by anyone apart from the teacher.
> if you dont use personal experience for examples what can you use?
Really good questions Lizzie and it shows you have given some thought to the task. Given that it is a "draft" don't worry if it's not perfect. The first step is to get something on the page then improve it. I'm not sure about your questions re. lay-out. Do you mean it may not follow TEEL? I suggest youwork from a plan that follows TEEL and play around with it. There is no need to write using particularly personal examples: there is plenty to draw from in the film text, the poem and general knowledge. I have included a link to a really good article relevant to the task ALL STUDENTS SHOULD READ THIS.
ReplyDeletehttp://www.theage.com.au/opinion/society-and-culture/its-time-girls-rejected-push-to-join-riteofpassage-rituals-20100930-15z6i.html
I'll check in again Sat if you have some specific questions. Read some of the posts from other forms as I've noticed some some quite good.
Go Saints! (I think that's what I'm meant to say if I want to conform to the social expectations at this time of the year)
Ms Kennedy i have a question. Can we draw on personal experience as well as being quite general and mentioning a study that a University did about conformity? Because that is what i was planning on doing.
ReplyDeleteIf you refer to a study that was conducted by a university there are 2 things you need to do. Firstly you need to ensure that you mention it in your statement of explanation and explain why you are using it. Secondly when you refer to it in your essay you must be VERY precise. What university? What year? What was the title of the study? Who were the authors? Make sure it is a well known university not some half baked university of feel good academia!So you would say," In the Melbourne University study entitled "Isolation and the Community" (Jackson and Sonnet:2008)the authors found that 40% blah blah blah.
ReplyDeleteYes you can draw on personal experience but make sure that the essay does not become an anecdote.You have to EXPLORE THE THEME not tell a story. Feel free to post any more questions if you have them.
Statement of intention:
ReplyDeleteFor the SAC I have chosen to explore the prompt ‘conformity destroys individuality’. I disagree with this prompt and will be arguing that conforming does not necessarily mean you are losing your individuality and that being an individualist can lead to an unhappy lifestyle. I am writing this essay for people who already have a good understanding and knowledge of the topic and prompt. I will be writing it as an expository essay with no personal references in my essay. I will be drawing on the ideas of identity and Belonging through the film ‘About a boy’, as well as individualism, conformity and isolation. As I am writing this piece for knowledgeable readers I will be using formal language as well as writing in the third person throughout my essay to appear informative and knowledgeable the whole time.
Statement of Intention
ReplyDeleteFor my SAC I have chosen to write an expository response to the topic: "To be true to yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is a great achievement". I would like to discuss what it means to be true to yourself in terms of culture and/or religion and this is where i may draw on personal experience from my culture. In addition i thought of incorporating "In Duty Bound" as part of the bit about being true to yourself.
I would also like to use "About a Boy" and talk about how Marcus is an weird individual and how people like Will try to make him a different person in contrast to his mother who wanted him to be himself. (I'm not sure if that will work or not, will have to re-watch the film). Another thing i would like to talk about are countries/cultures that haven't been changed by Western influences. I think this would work well wit the context of "identity and belonging".
For my Expository/Persuasive SAC, I have selected the prompt ‘Conformity destroys Individuality’. I will be combining both expository and persuasive to discuss this prompt. In doing this I hope to provide an explanation for both the negatives and positives in relation to conformity and individuality and then finishing with my own opinion. I have looked at this topic from a different angle also and will bring up my view that individuality is a form of conformity; everyone conforms to something, some ‘label’ whether they realise it or not.
ReplyDeleteI am aiming my piece of writing to an educated adult who has a thorough and clear understanding of the theme ‘Identity and Belonging’ and also are familiar with the studied texts and stimulus material provided.
I have chosen to write my essay in the form of both an expository and persuasive piece consisting of an introduction, three body paragraphs (structured using TEEL) and finishing with a conclusion.
I will employ a formal tone and speak using first person language as I aim to persuade the reader to agree with the points I bring forward.