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Creating and Presenting Response Jess Scaletti
“To be true to yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is a great achievement”
I was motivated to write this piece about my family and personal experiences because I wanted to highlight the importance of staying true to what you want and what you believe despite the forces in life that sometimes restrict us. I thought it was also important to write about this and the particular situations mentioned as they relate to our current theme in year 11 English, “Identity and belonging”. Family and relationships play a large role in this theme so I feel as though my own personal family stories help to contribute towards this theme as well as the context studied – About a boy.
This piece has initially been written for a school magazine but is also suitable for year 11 teachers and most high school students. I wanted to demonstrate how being true to yourself in world that is constantly trying to make you something else is a great achievement and how it has been achieved in my life.
This piece was written in the expository form with a typical introduction ad summarising conclusion. The main body consists of three paragraphs each describing particular family situations about my parents, myself and experiences in moving schools.
In developing ideas for this piece I have drawn on a number of memories from my family life and my own personal experiences. I have written about the consequences that come with how we dress. This relates to About a Boy and how Marcus and his mum wore clothes that seem stupid to everyone else but it helped them with their confidence to be themselves and to not just follow in the footsteps of the crowd. I have written about the struggles that come with divorce but how important it is to maintain relationships despite the struggle and sometimes, inconvenience. This relates to About a Boy in that Marcus chose to see Will despite everyone else’s wishes and because of that decision, he felt happiness after being bullied at school and could escape his troubles at home. The third paragraph talks about my experience in moving schools in year 10. It highlights the theme of belonging and how it is important to feel as though you belong somewhere even if you don’t feel like it in the beginning.
The language used in this piece sits in-between formal and informal because I don’t want it to be too official or too colloquial either.
Creating and Presenting – To be true to yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is a great achievement. Stefan Imberger I was inspired to compose this piece of writing about life in general and how being true to yourself is something to be proud of. I intend to do this so that I can highlight the importance of staying true to yourself and what you believe in and how you want to live your life. This relates to the topic of Identity and Belonging. This piece has been written for the school magazine, but it is also suitable for year 11 students and any other high school student that could relate to the topic. I want to show that being true to your self is a great achievement and you don’t have to conform to fit in. Throughout my piece I intend to draw on ideas from personal experiences and from the class text, the film About a Boy. Throughout the piece I will draw on various moments from the film About a Boy, and at times replace them with life experiences. The contention that my ideas will be developed around is that “it is a great achievement to be yourself and not conform, but individuality isn’t always the best way to go”. I will write about how it is difficult to be yourself when all others around conform and how at times there can be consequences when you be true to yourself. It will relate how Will does not conform with the other kids at school and how he stays true to himself. My piece will be written as an expository piece, that includes a introduction and a conclusion to summarise the entire piece. It will contain three paragraphs that will contain that will draw on the themes of About a Boy and life experiences from myself and humans in general. The language that I will use within the piece, I feel that the language should a mix of formal and informal depending on the point that I am trying prove. But I don’t want the piece to be to official as it is being written for high school students.
"To be true to yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is a great achievement"
In composing this piece of writing, i drew inspiration from my person life and the lessons i have learnt throughout, it that closely relate to this prompt as well as ideas relating to the film text "About A Boy" which we have studied thoroughly in class and the theme of "Identity and Belonging". Writing this piece from a personal point of view, i intend to show how i myself, are able to draw upon real life examples in response to the prompt and highlight the importance of staying true to who you are.
I am writing this piece for the school magazine, designed to target high school students from year 7-12. The piece is also suitable for people of any age who can relate to the topic. I want to show the reader the significance of following your heart and doing what you want to do.
The piece i will write will be in expository style, with a typical introduction and conclusion, with a body that follows the expository form. The main body will consist of paragraphs relating to the topic, with ideas drawn from "About A Boy" but evidence from personal experience.
In developing ideas for this piece, i have drawn on ideas from various moments and key ideas from film text "About A Boy" and draw relationships from these ideas with my own personal experiences. I have written about the difficulty of staying true to what you want to do, and not allowing your parents to control who you are and what you become. I have drawn this idea from Marcus not being allowed to do certain things such as eat McDonalds because his mum is a vegetarian. I will discuss the difficulty of not conforming and becoming just like everyone in order to become popular and well liked. I have drawn ideas from Marcus and his singing in which he still does although everyone laughs at him for it. An lastly i will discuss how difficult it is listening to your parents argue and imagining life without them being together. I have drawn on this idea from Marcus' single mum and Will who is also single, and how difficult Marcus' life must be.
I have tried to keep the language formal yet informal, in the way that it is easy and appropriate for my audience. I think it is necessary to use this type of language as it will allow my point of view to be shared without confusing or boring the audience.
Creating and Presenting - Statement of explanation - Topic #B Conformity destroys individuality.
I was inspired to write this piece about the dangers of conformity in society because I believe it is a major issue in modern day culture and we should not be held back by what others want of us. This shall heavily relate to our current theme of study “Identity and belonging” as well as the film text “About a boy”.
This piece of writing is primarily directed at year 11 English teachers, but is also appropriate for other year 11 students also studying “Identity and belonging”, as both will understand the risk of conformity and being “sheep” in society in detail.
I have chosen to write this in a traditionally expository format; an introduction, followed by three body paragraphs and a conclusion. My introduction will be used to signpost my body paragraphs, which shall include why conformity is a bad thing and how it changes people for the worse in their loss of individuality. I will use examples from the film text “About a boy” to do this.
I will be most prominently focusing on evidence from “About a boy”, while also drawing on real life situations and generalizing this to suit our culture. Examples of such evidence would be the change of Marcus’ status in the school without any conformity required on his part, and the lack of individuality demonstrated by the crowd of bullies as many characters simply blend in and end up unnoticed.
I intend to write this with relatively colloquial language use, employing similes and metaphors to assist in generalizing conformity to our culture. I will however be wary to not be too colloquial, as I will also stay with the proper structure of an expository essay, and employ the TEEL structure within.
Creating and Presenting Response: I have chosen to do “To be true to yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is a great achievement.”
I have been inspired to write about this because I’ve experienced the temptation of conforming in life, and changing who I am, but have resisted, so I know how it feels, so I’m going to be able to write about it from personal experience. It’s important to stay true to yourself, no matter the forces you face, and this relates to our current topic in English of ‘Identity and Belonging’. I can also relate this to the movie ‘About a Boy’, as Marcus is a perfect example of how hard it is to stay true to yourself and not conform in life.
The piece of writing I’m doing will be mainly directed at the year 11 English teachers, but can also be directed at high school students. It can basically be directed at anyone who can easily grasp the topic, and is intended to show the reader why it is important to remain yourself and how difficult it is to remain yourself against the pressures faced in life.
The piece will be in an expository essay sort of structure with an introduction, a conclusion and about 3 main body paragraphs. The main body paragraphs will relate to personal experiences, and have examples from them. I will also touch on various moments in the movie ‘About a Boy’.
When developing ideas for this piece, I have drawn on personal experiences in my life and key moments in the movie ‘About a Boy’. I am going to discuss how hard it is to not conform in society, because of the demand to ‘fit in’. I will write about things such as the way Marcus dresses, and how people react to it, Marcus singing, even though he is insulted and teased for it and how Marcus does not conform, even though he goes through so much pressure because his mom taught him not to be a ‘sheep’.
The language I will use in my piece will be formal, but not too formal as it is intended to be easily grasped by high school students, and so it can be easily understood by the reader. I will also use relate-able ideas to make the reader be able to relate to the piece. I don’t want the piece to be too ‘official’ though. I will also be using TEEL.
Creating and Presenting - Statement of explanation - Topic 2 Conformity destroys individuality.
I was motivated to write about this piece about conformity and individuality as I feel that it is a very important issue among all people, especially teenagers. I intend to relate directly to the audience in and effort to raise awareness about the issue and potentially prevent it from occurring.
This piece is written for the school newspaper, so it will relate directly to teenagers of ages 12-18 who are likely to face the issue of conforming and loss of individuality at some point. However it will also be useful in assisting people of all ages who face similar challenges in terms of identity and individuality to those of the primary target audience.
This piece will be written in a persuasive style. It will contain an introduction which introduces the issue and outlines my viewpoint on the issue, 3 body paragraphs that will support my contention that conformity does destroy individuality, and will relate directly to the film 'About a Boy' and the context of 'Identity and Belonging' to help the reader relate to the issue.
In developing ideas for this piece I have drawn on various moments from 'About a Boy', particularly in relation to Marcus and his lack of freedom because of his mother's lifestyle. I intend to incorporate the desire of humans to fit in with others and how it restricts our ability to be individuals, and will relate this directly to the context of 'Identity and Belonging'. I will also relate it directly to 'About a Boy', particularly to scenes involving Marcus changing himself in order to fit in.
In keeping with the form of my piece I will be employing very persuasive language techniques in order to help get across my viewpoint on the issue. Therefore I will employ various types of inclusive, colloquial and emotional language, whilst maintaining a somewhat informal tone to appeal to the younger audience.
Persuasive essay "To be true to yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is a great achievement."
In composing this piece of writing I am inspired to defend and try to convince the audience about my point of view that it is a great thing to be trully yourself when everyone else is, in ab certain way, trying to turn you from what you are into something else.
This piece of writing is targeted principally to the Year 11 English teachers, but also to the school students from years 7 to 12 in an effort to persuade them that it is a great thing to be true to who you are, principally when the rest of the world wants to model you the way they want you to be.
I have chosen to write this piece in a persuasive mode with standard text structure which is composed by three paragraphs consisting the body, an introduction briefly informing the audience about my point and a conclusion which links my topics back to my overall point.
In this piece of writing I intend to incorporate general arguments about individuality and the importance of being true to yourself. I also intend to present after each argument an example to link it to the movie "About a Boy" and then link both to my main point in the chosen prompt.
It is my intention to compose this piece of writing using persuasive inclusive language in an effort to create a casual tone, making use of rhetorical questions and some repetitions as persuasive strategies. By these ways I intend to create a relaxed and unofficial looking piece of persuasive writing.
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Jess Scaletti
“To be true to yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is a great achievement”
I was motivated to write this piece about my family and personal experiences because I wanted to highlight the importance of staying true to what you want and what you believe despite the forces in life that sometimes restrict us. I thought it was also important to write about this and the particular situations mentioned as they relate to our current theme in year 11 English, “Identity and belonging”. Family and relationships play a large role in this theme so I feel as though my own personal family stories help to contribute towards this theme as well as the context studied – About a boy.
This piece has initially been written for a school magazine but is also suitable for year 11 teachers and most high school students. I wanted to demonstrate how being true to yourself in world that is constantly trying to make you something else is a great achievement and how it has been achieved in my life.
This piece was written in the expository form with a typical introduction ad summarising conclusion. The main body consists of three paragraphs each describing particular family situations about my parents, myself and experiences in moving schools.
In developing ideas for this piece I have drawn on a number of memories from my family life and my own personal experiences. I have written about the consequences that come with how we dress. This relates to About a Boy and how Marcus and his mum wore clothes that seem stupid to everyone else but it helped them with their confidence to be themselves and to not just follow in the footsteps of the crowd. I have written about the struggles that come with divorce but how important it is to maintain relationships despite the struggle and sometimes, inconvenience. This relates to About a Boy in that Marcus chose to see Will despite everyone else’s wishes and because of that decision, he felt happiness after being bullied at school and could escape his troubles at home. The third paragraph talks about my experience in moving schools in year 10. It highlights the theme of belonging and how it is important to feel as though you belong somewhere even if you don’t feel like it in the beginning.
The language used in this piece sits in-between formal and informal because I don’t want it to be too official or too colloquial either.
Creating and Presenting – To be true to yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is a great achievement.
ReplyDeleteStefan Imberger
I was inspired to compose this piece of writing about life in general and how being true to yourself is something to be proud of. I intend to do this so that I can highlight the importance of staying true to yourself and what you believe in and how you want to live your life. This relates to the topic of Identity and Belonging.
This piece has been written for the school magazine, but it is also suitable for year 11 students and any other high school student that could relate to the topic. I want to show that being true to your self is a great achievement and you don’t have to conform to fit in.
Throughout my piece I intend to draw on ideas from personal experiences and from the class text, the film About a Boy. Throughout the piece I will draw on various moments from the film About a Boy, and at times replace them with life experiences. The contention that my ideas will be developed around is that “it is a great achievement to be yourself and not conform, but individuality isn’t always the best way to go”. I will write about how it is difficult to be yourself when all others around conform and how at times there can be consequences when you be true to yourself. It will relate how Will does not conform with the other kids at school and how he stays true to himself.
My piece will be written as an expository piece, that includes a introduction and a conclusion to summarise the entire piece. It will contain three paragraphs that will contain that will draw on the themes of About a Boy and life experiences from myself and humans in general.
The language that I will use within the piece, I feel that the language should a mix of formal and informal depending on the point that I am trying prove. But I don’t want the piece to be to official as it is being written for high school students.
Hey guys, this is my statement of explanation :)
ReplyDelete"To be true to yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is a great achievement"
In composing this piece of writing, i drew inspiration from my person life and the lessons i have learnt throughout, it that closely relate to this prompt as well as ideas relating to the film text "About A Boy" which we have studied thoroughly in class and the theme of "Identity and Belonging". Writing this piece from a personal point of view, i intend to show how i myself, are able to draw upon real life examples in response to the prompt and highlight the importance of staying true to who you are.
I am writing this piece for the school magazine, designed to target high school students from year 7-12. The piece is also suitable for people of any age who can relate to the topic. I want to show the reader the significance of following your heart and doing what you want to do.
The piece i will write will be in expository style, with a typical introduction and conclusion, with a body that follows the expository form. The main body will consist of paragraphs relating to the topic, with ideas drawn from "About A Boy" but evidence from personal experience.
In developing ideas for this piece, i have drawn on ideas from various moments and key ideas from film text "About A Boy" and draw relationships from these ideas with my own personal experiences. I have written about the difficulty of staying true to what you want to do, and not allowing your parents to control who you are and what you become. I have drawn this idea from Marcus not being allowed to do certain things such as eat McDonalds because his mum is a vegetarian.
I will discuss the difficulty of not conforming and becoming just like everyone in order to become popular and well liked. I have drawn ideas from Marcus and his singing in which he still does although everyone laughs at him for it.
An lastly i will discuss how difficult it is listening to your parents argue and imagining life without them being together. I have drawn on this idea from Marcus' single mum and Will who is also single, and how difficult Marcus' life must be.
I have tried to keep the language formal yet informal, in the way that it is easy and appropriate for my audience. I think it is necessary to use this type of language as it will allow my point of view to be shared without confusing or boring the audience.
Creating and Presenting - Statement of explanation - Topic #B Conformity destroys individuality.
ReplyDeleteI was inspired to write this piece about the dangers of conformity in society because I believe it is a major issue in modern day culture and we should not be held back by what others want of us. This shall heavily relate to our current theme of study “Identity and belonging” as well as the film text “About a boy”.
This piece of writing is primarily directed at year 11 English teachers, but is also appropriate for other year 11 students also studying “Identity and belonging”, as both will understand the risk of conformity and being “sheep” in society in detail.
I have chosen to write this in a traditionally expository format; an introduction, followed by three body paragraphs and a conclusion. My introduction will be used to signpost my body paragraphs, which shall include why conformity is a bad thing and how it changes people for the worse in their loss of individuality. I will use examples from the film text “About a boy” to do this.
I will be most prominently focusing on evidence from “About a boy”, while also drawing on real life situations and generalizing this to suit our culture. Examples of such evidence would be the change of Marcus’ status in the school without any conformity required on his part, and the lack of individuality demonstrated by the crowd of bullies as many characters simply blend in and end up unnoticed.
I intend to write this with relatively colloquial language use, employing similes and metaphors to assist in generalizing conformity to our culture. I will however be wary to not be too colloquial, as I will also stay with the proper structure of an expository essay, and employ the TEEL structure within.
Nick, i really like the way you're going with your essay :)
ReplyDeletesounds like it will be really good and well written and structured.
Creating and Presenting Response:
ReplyDeleteI have chosen to do “To be true to yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is a great achievement.”
I have been inspired to write about this because I’ve experienced the temptation of conforming in life, and changing who I am, but have resisted, so I know how it feels, so I’m going to be able to write about it from personal experience. It’s important to stay true to yourself, no matter the forces you face, and this relates to our current topic in English of ‘Identity and Belonging’. I can also relate this to the movie ‘About a Boy’, as Marcus is a perfect example of how hard it is to stay true to yourself and not conform in life.
The piece of writing I’m doing will be mainly directed at the year 11 English teachers, but can also be directed at high school students. It can basically be directed at anyone who can easily grasp the topic, and is intended to show the reader why it is important to remain yourself and how difficult it is to remain yourself against the pressures faced in life.
The piece will be in an expository essay sort of structure with an introduction, a conclusion and about 3 main body paragraphs. The main body paragraphs will relate to personal experiences, and have examples from them. I will also touch on various moments in the movie ‘About a Boy’.
When developing ideas for this piece, I have drawn on personal experiences in my life and key moments in the movie ‘About a Boy’. I am going to discuss how hard it is to not conform in society, because of the demand to ‘fit in’. I will write about things such as the way Marcus dresses, and how people react to it, Marcus singing, even though he is insulted and teased for it and how Marcus does not conform, even though he goes through so much pressure because his mom taught him not to be a ‘sheep’.
The language I will use in my piece will be formal, but not too formal as it is intended to be easily grasped by high school students, and so it can be easily understood by the reader. I will also use relate-able ideas to make the reader be able to relate to the piece. I don’t want the piece to be too ‘official’ though. I will also be using TEEL.
Creating and Presenting - Statement of explanation - Topic 2
ReplyDeleteConformity destroys individuality.
I was motivated to write about this piece about conformity and individuality as I feel that it is a very important issue among all people, especially teenagers. I intend to relate directly to the audience in and effort to raise awareness about the issue and potentially prevent it from occurring.
This piece is written for the school newspaper, so it will relate directly to teenagers of ages 12-18 who are likely to face the issue of conforming and loss of individuality at some point. However it will also be useful in assisting people of all ages who face similar challenges in terms of identity and individuality to those of the primary target audience.
This piece will be written in a persuasive style. It will contain an introduction which introduces the issue and outlines my viewpoint on the issue, 3 body paragraphs that will support my contention that conformity does destroy individuality, and will relate directly to the film 'About a Boy' and the context of 'Identity and Belonging' to help the reader relate to the issue.
In developing ideas for this piece I have drawn on various moments from 'About a Boy', particularly in relation to Marcus and his lack of freedom because of his mother's lifestyle. I intend to incorporate the desire of humans to fit in with others and how it restricts our ability to be individuals, and will relate this directly to the context of 'Identity and Belonging'. I will also relate it directly to 'About a Boy', particularly to scenes involving Marcus changing himself in order to fit in.
In keeping with the form of my piece I will be employing very persuasive language techniques in order to help get across my viewpoint on the issue. Therefore I will employ various types of inclusive, colloquial and emotional language, whilst maintaining a somewhat informal tone to appeal to the younger audience.
Creating and presenting:
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"To be true to yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is a great achievement."
In composing this piece of writing I am inspired to defend and try to convince the audience about my point of view that it is a great thing to be trully yourself when everyone else is, in ab certain way, trying to turn you from what you are into something else.
This piece of writing is targeted principally to the Year 11 English teachers, but also to the school students from years 7 to 12 in an effort to persuade them that it is a great thing to be true to who you are, principally when the rest of the world wants to model you the way they want you to be.
I have chosen to write this piece in a persuasive mode with standard text structure which is composed by three paragraphs consisting the body, an introduction briefly informing the audience about my point and a conclusion which links my topics back to my overall point.
In this piece of writing I intend to incorporate general arguments about individuality and the importance of being true to yourself. I also intend to present after each argument an example to link it to the movie "About a Boy" and then link both to my main point in the chosen prompt.
It is my intention to compose this piece of writing using persuasive inclusive language in an effort to create a casual tone, making use of rhetorical questions and some repetitions as persuasive strategies. By these ways I intend to create a relaxed and unofficial looking piece of persuasive writing.